Yet another good song is ruined by out of tune guitars.

Lyrics:
When you need me
I'll be there
And when you want me
I'll be near
When you see me
I'm never there
Thought I was gone
I'm everywhere

Don't
Count (call) on me
Don't
Count (call) on me
Don't
Count(call) on me

I'm everywhere
I'm everything
I'm everyone you thought I'm not

Don't
Count (call) on me
Don't
Count (call) on me
Don't
Count(call) on me

When you abuse me
I'll take it in stride
And when you refuse me
I'll never mind
When you want
to push me around
I'll be your carpet
for you to walk down

I'm everywhere
I'm everything
I'm everyone you thought I'm not

Don't
Count (call) on me
Don't
Count (call) on me
Don't
Count(call) on me

When you need me
I'll be there
And when you want me
I'll be near

Hey Theo good job man.Your sound is pretty cool.Theres a lot going on here as a mix I wish there was a little more separation on it.But is a great piece of work again good job hi vote.!

Yeah it's a good song, I like it.
Just I think it repeats the 'don't count/call on me' a bit too much.
Cheers
Geo

agree.........

Don't repeat the 'don't count/call on me' too much.

 

Good job

as stated prior, to repetitious.  and you already
pointed out, guitars need tuning.. 
 Love the song though..


blueyes

I think this song has great potential!!

In the chorus I think you should shorten the first Note 'Don't', this will allow the song more breath.
                    
I dissagree with the others in terms of the chorus being too repatative, but I think you should work on the chorus more, so it sounds more different from the verse, I hope this makes sence.

Denis

Thanks guys.

Yes, it is rather repetitive. I was going to add another verse after the first chorus..thing...key..change..thing (B section?) but I ran out of creative juices.

Good advice Denis. I think I will re-record this at a better studio with in-tune guitars soon.