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This is a first draft that would love feedback.
U are to humble in the begining....
Of course there will be somebody that will like it
Nice mood, but molody is kinda boring...it's nice, but it's repetitive....u need chorus that will break that repetitivnes...sooner change...anyway, nice try. I like your voice and playing, now you just need good melody...fool around..
Take care.
Spoony



Spoony
Thank you!
That was simple but not dull. It works so well with just guitar and voice. Don't never overproduce it. I think they do like that to so many songs nowadays and spoil them.
This made me feel calm and serene.
If I have to say something negative
then I think that with better equipments the sound could be better.
But the roughness I don't mind!
At all!!!!!!!!!!!!!
So thanks...
By the way... That sounded a little bit like Elliott Smith. I don't know if you know him but anyway........
That was simple but not dull. It works so well with just guitar and voice. Don't never overproduce it. I think they do like that to so many songs nowadays and spoil them.
This made me feel calm and serene.
If I have to say something negative

But the roughness I don't mind!

So thanks...
By the way... That sounded a little bit like Elliott Smith. I don't know if you know him but anyway........
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sorry Ian, I just don't hear a simon
and garfunkel riff there.. more like
arlo guthrie, bob dylan, cat stevens
and neil simon rolled into one..
this is a great piece of work bro.
no bout a doubt it!!!
I seem to be in one of those lead
run, moods... that is I can hear it
with just a little four to eight bars
three or four places in the song,
were as the rhythm is keeping that
finger picking style very strong,
just following a chord progression
that would allow in those four to
eight bars, a upright bass or fretless
bass walk around the building a
couple of times, while another
guitar, (acoustic or maybe a big
body jazz box) walked with it,
and maybe even doing a fifth to
third or third to fifth harmony
progressing walk with the bass..
this would only be for those lil
four or eight bar spots "turn
arounds", to coin a phrase..
again this is just cuz I am in one
of my "I.M.H.O." type moods
today bro!
blessings,
Dan - Blueyes
and garfunkel riff there.. more like
arlo guthrie, bob dylan, cat stevens
and neil simon rolled into one..
this is a great piece of work bro.
no bout a doubt it!!!
I seem to be in one of those lead
run, moods... that is I can hear it
with just a little four to eight bars
three or four places in the song,
were as the rhythm is keeping that
finger picking style very strong,
just following a chord progression
that would allow in those four to
eight bars, a upright bass or fretless
bass walk around the building a
couple of times, while another
guitar, (acoustic or maybe a big
body jazz box) walked with it,
and maybe even doing a fifth to
third or third to fifth harmony
progressing walk with the bass..
this would only be for those lil
four or eight bar spots "turn
arounds", to coin a phrase..
again this is just cuz I am in one
of my "I.M.H.O." type moods
today bro!
blessings,
Dan - Blueyes
Your fingerpicking is admirable. I like to pretend I'm a fingerpicker myself, but nothing compared to you. Well done. I like this a lot. Have you considered doubling the vox on the chorus to help set it apart a little more?
I agree with Oldies324 that after the first chorus it starts to get a little repetitive. I realize that you're telling a story and this is supposed to be the focal point of the song, but it wouldn't hurt at all to add something else after the first chorus to keep the listener interested! I gave this a 75% because I like this kind of music
I agree with Oldies324 that after the first chorus it starts to get a little repetitive. I realize that you're telling a story and this is supposed to be the focal point of the song, but it wouldn't hurt at all to add something else after the first chorus to keep the listener interested! I gave this a 75% because I like this kind of music

This is great. I was singing the chorus at work all day.
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