#1April 13th, 2007 · 04:47 PM
117 threads / 88 songs
256 posts
United Kingdom

This song is not in a battle

I have lots of phlegm at the moment, but I think the phlegm all adds to the effect. Haha.

Lend me one more cigarette sir,
I'll be your deadbeat girl.
Buy me another drink mister,
And I'm your deadbeat girl.
I'll prove your assumtion.
I'm just a deadbeat girl.
Trick me with your painted words,
Cause I'm just a deadbeat girl.

I'll fit so comfortably under your thumb.
I'll let you be king for a night,
Or at least til I'm done.

Lay all your cheap tricks on me,
Don't bother with my name or age.
After all, I'm just a deadbeat girl.

You'll fit so comfortably under my skin,
You can lay it on real thick,
While I pretend I'm not listening.
And by the time they close this dive,
I might even feel something.
But I know when the morning comes,
We wont remember anything.

A deadbeat boy and a deadbeat girl,
Can't make eachother feel.

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#2April 14th, 2007 · 05:03 AM
18 threads / 18 songs
52 posts
now i understand!
you are from the UK! what amazing lyrics & voice! you are a professional act, right?
you've got my vote already, thumbs up!
#3April 14th, 2007 · 01:08 PM
34 threads / 16 songs
538 posts
I think the vox could be mixed better, but I agree with eftos about the lyrics and the singing.  And the beats are tight as well.
#4April 15th, 2007 · 11:35 AM
118 threads / 55 songs
3,086 posts
this is ace
your sound is rapidly maturing! great arrangement, excellent lyrics. your voice sounds more mature aswell, as you said because of the phlegm.

In the end part, maybe take the reverb off some of the parts, it sounds like you put it on the entire mix, makes it sound muddled and foggy. Still I like how it ends.

Eh, good luck with your pursuit of fame. I think you have a chance, seeing your determination - talent wise you wont have to worry about a thing! now it's just about attitude and persistance..!
#5April 15th, 2007 · 12:27 PM
54 threads / 29 songs
1,552 posts
United Kingdom
Like the song; arrangement, instrumental sounds, vocals (as always), and overall arrangement.  Not so keen on the processing and fx that have been put on this though - as PX says, it makes the song sound a little too muddled.

But a good track all the same.

#6June 1st, 2007 · 04:16 PM
7 threads / 7 songs
24 posts
United States of America
Very cool
This is really cool very fun, I like it a lot great lyrics.
Keep up the amazing work.

The New Indie Kid
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