Just remixed the song, so I hope you like it how it is now.

Previous spot:

"This Feeling Is Killing Me is a ballad I wrote about 2 years ago. The lyrics will explain many things in case you don't understand why I wrote it.
This is mainly like a demo, cause I want you all to tell me what you like and what you don't; where should I put other voices or where I must take out any instrument.
Hope you like it.
I'm not a singer! My voice is aweful, so don't take too much in count the vocals but more the lyrics.

Here goes lyrics:

I don’t want to be this way anymore
I feel like a crown of thorns were impaling my heart
Drowning every thought of you in a cup of tears
The pain asphyxiates all your memories

There are those  who say love hurts, but they are fools
Cause the truth is that love can only kill
The love you never gave is the breath I need
Burning into ashes the affections I layed at your feet

But there’s no turning back
And this feeling is killing me
Killing me

There’s something I still don’t understand
Why there’s no way to forget you
Everytime I close my eyes, I see your face, I see your smile
And then these awful words come to my mind :“you are just a friend”

But there’s no turning back
And this feeling is killing me
Killing me

Now I think the worse that happened in my life
Was to have committed the mistake of meeting you
If I hadn't’t looked into those beautiful eyes
Now I would be happy, I would be another man
Far from you, free from you.

But there’s no turning back
And this feeling is killing me
But there’s no turning back
And this feeling is killing me
Killing me"

this is sounding awesome
nice melody Iszil
looks like one for the playlist
and a download

nice vocals
a very good recording
can you post the lyrics  Iszil ?
on the spot lead also
Nice work

Will Rate

Flyer

Ok, edited the first post.

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man I totally agree with Flyer here!

Why you think your vocals suck?? they fit this song perfectly!

Where did you get those drum sounds from??

Great production and song!
High vote from me!

Greetings!
Wisdom

Thanks for posting your lyrics Iszil
I cant agree with you on your vocals
you think they arent that good
I think they are great
Ill try to download this again
I had trouble with the download yesterday
Nice work again Iszil

You may want to add some harmonies
since your looking for suggestions
well You have some hamony going on  but its really faint...
low..maybe bring them up a bit

Flyer

Agree with previous posts, I like the forseto in the vox where you are singing 'Killing me', try some more, it sounds great. Nice work.

Denis

Decent bit of guitar work here Iz, all except the solo work at 3:40 ish in my opinion as I don't think it played as well as you can, and the tone doesn't quite suite the rest of the song as it's too electronic sounding.
The vocals are absolutely fine - their not quite as well defined as I think they should be, but that's probably because you tried to hide them a little when you mixed the track.  They're loud enough, but the fx and eq muffle them a little.  There really is no need - actually your voice sounds a little like Brian May's
The drum programming is very good.
Good overall song
Keep it up....... don't be ashamed of your voice!

I like this one dude....

      This rocks man....  Awesome job...  Incredible how far you've come since you first started out on here...


           Vocals are great too  btw...

             Rock on !!!!

                   JimK

the strings remind me of super mario (didn't I say that before?). but you didnt change the rocking drums. the drum sound could be a bit lighter.

Love the guitar tone, lovely and warm and the vocals are very emotive.  I'd agree with TritonK, the drums are a bit too heavy, specifically the snare, maybe a softer piccolo or woodsnare sound, slightly jazzier would really   give the song a softness that would lift it somewhere else.

Well, about the Strings: I made them in a MIDI software, so thy suck, but i didn't have any other way to make them.
Now I got the Cubase LE from my college, so if anyone could send me some string for the Cubase I'd love it.

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In Battle!

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To compensate for those who are afraid to give an honest opinion, here's mine :
The effort is commendable, because I suspect that quite some time crept into recording it, but :
- Some of the words in the text I had to look up in a dictionary
- The synth sometimes tortured my ears, giving a rather sharp sound now and then.
- There were several voices mixed together, often out of sync, without harmony.

Such a nice song, really like it.
Now that you've got Cubase and the MIDI file for the 'midi program' you could easily download a few plug-ins for the strings sound (or another sound you may have in mind). If you can find FM vst/directX/stand alone synth, it has the most amazing sounds. (many different string sounds)
Jiminuk says you sound like Brian May, I think you sound more like Peter Gabriel, that beautiful soft mesmerizing voice. You just need to practice and stop saying you cant sing......

EVERY BODY CAN SING.

How, is a very different matter!!!

Yes top marks, nice song, well produced, a bit of 'tweeking' hear and there and it would be spot on!

About the words in the dictionary, that's not exactly my problem.
About the synths, they suck but that all what I have.
About the voice problems and that, well, as I said I'm not a singer so I'm not pretty good harmonizing, and well, gotta say I didn't take so much time to make some decent harmonies... Sorry.

But thanks for the criticism, I'll consider that.

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