Hey so this is a short recording of me singing and playing guitar, obviously.  I'm trying to improve my singing and melody-creating.  Please do not critique the quality, lyrics, shortness of recording, or that sort of thing.  This is by no means a completed song.  I would like critique on my singing in particular.

Thanks!

I think your voice is really cool. I like your accent. You may not be perfectly on pitch 100% of the time, but I think that makes it even cooler sounding.

the voice fits nicely 
it would be cool if you could play the whole song a little bit slower especially guitar.
I reccommend you ask people to critique (positively) your song in all areas it will help a lot.
Its cool that you put up an idea on here because the song is going to get better and i already like it.
cya!

you're falling flat sometimes on the vocals...
try singing just part of the words over and over...
what is it "run so fast"..?
try stretching the notes longer to hit the correct tune...
and you're holding back... take some notes go higher, harder, longer...
that kinda thing...

I agree some with this the words feel rushed  some.  your singing is off key in spots ...
I would suggest slowing everything down some to give you time to concentrate on the pitch more.  when you get to nailing the pitch down I would then try speeding it up, with as many words as your singing it's going to take some air so make sure you no where in the phrases you are going to take a breath.(this is very important
 as it gives your vocals support and it will sound smoother)
Over all for just guitar and vocals sounds like they were recorded at the same time  I'd say  good job.

Hey guys,

Thanks!  I will try the different things you mentioned, I appreciate the help.

I'll repost when I have the full song recorded so you can see the outcome.

Thanks again 

Record separately so you can focus on each part individually
I hear the potential

I would purposely slow the song down which will give you more time to identify where you're going flat. It could also be something simple, in that you have the melody in your mind, but the chord does not go with it. On the positive side your tone is nice, so keep working on it. Sometimes playing less is more, the more relaxed you are the easier it becomes.

Denis

Denis- thanks for the advice.  I've been playing around with playing more relaxedly and like what you said about "playing less is more", that makes sense, I like it, thanks.