Arg. Well, I was writing this song, and in the middle of fixing the EQ my power went out, leaving me with an unsaved file and this old rendered mp3. So, I apologize for the messed up EQ and compression, because this is all I have.

Anyway, this was just a simple 3 chord agressive song I decided to write out of the blue.

Lyrics:
Sharpened spear under my arm
Wooden spike is piercing my tongue
Fall asleep on a bed of stone
Eat my meat and I値l never go home
Painted caves over my head
In twenty years I値l sure be dead
Fire burns the embers drown
And  all These days are burning me down
I feel empowered, I feel like nature
I feel aggressive, I feel alone
Raise the spear o弾r my head
Raise my voice, until I知 dead

We remember
We surrender
We remember
We surrender

Loaded gun under my coat
Metal rod is piercing my tounge
Fall asleep on a bed of iron
Eat my meat and I値l never go home
Bolted vents over my head
In fifteen years, I値l sure be dead
Heater speaks, the embers sound
And all these days are boring me down
We remember
We surrender
We remember
We surrender

I feel employed, I feel real mature
I feel repressive, I feel alone
Raise my pen o弾r my head
Raise my voice, until I知 dead

I got  a spear I got a gun
I got a spike I got a rod
I got a cave I got a vent
I got a life I got in bed
I got a sword I got a pen
I got a chip inside my head
I got I got no soul I got no mind
I got no wife I got to find
I got no land I got no soil
I got no man for which to toil
I am a man, I am on fire
I am a homonid

the guitar sounds funky, not very appealing, maybe try and make it sound more smooth.... maybe u could use an acoustic or something more soft, maybe would have a cooler effect

The Eq on the vocals are OK. Interestingly enough it may sound OK if you added some quality bass to the current eq setting??

Eh, it is an acoustic guitar, it just sounds odd because of the EQ and the fact that its not a very good guitar.

I like it eq'ed like this, sounds lo-fi. I like your vocals on this one a lot. I dig the harmony things during the last verse. I like how you incorporate the electronic elements into it. Overall, it's pretty cool.

What did inspire you, cause the lyrics are pretty heavy, add a classical instrument like a violin, makes it a bit softer, geetz rasarani & krishna

some dual vocals or higher/longer vocals on the "we remember" break would be great....
like the vocals in the other bits... guitar and percussion
has a very cool sound...
actually, i like the lofi sound to it as well...
cool...rock on!


Hai Ke Yi!