#1February 25th, 2007 · 08:31 PM
151 threads / 150 songs
265 posts
United States of America
Homonid
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This song is not in a battle


Arg. Well, I was writing this song, and in the middle of fixing the EQ my power went out, leaving me with an unsaved file and this old rendered mp3. So, I apologize for the messed up EQ and compression, because this is all I have.

Anyway, this was just a simple 3 chord agressive song I decided to write out of the blue.

Lyrics:
Sharpened spear under my arm
Wooden spike is piercing my tongue
Fall asleep on a bed of stone
Eat my meat and I値l never go home
Painted caves over my head
In twenty years I値l sure be dead
Fire burns the embers drown
And  all These days are burning me down
I feel empowered, I feel like nature
I feel aggressive, I feel alone
Raise the spear o弾r my head
Raise my voice, until I知 dead

We remember
We surrender
We remember
We surrender

Loaded gun under my coat
Metal rod is piercing my tounge
Fall asleep on a bed of iron
Eat my meat and I値l never go home
Bolted vents over my head
In fifteen years, I値l sure be dead
Heater speaks, the embers sound
And all these days are boring me down
We remember
We surrender
We remember
We surrender

I feel employed, I feel real mature
I feel repressive, I feel alone
Raise my pen o弾r my head
Raise my voice, until I知 dead

I got  a spear I got a gun
I got a spike I got a rod
I got a cave I got a vent
I got a life I got in bed
I got a sword I got a pen
I got a chip inside my head
I got I got no soul I got no mind
I got no wife I got to find
I got no land I got no soil
I got no man for which to toil
I am a man, I am on fire
I am a homonid

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#2February 25th, 2007 · 10:40 PM
2 threads / 2 songs
47 posts
United States of America
the guitar sounds funky, not very appealing, maybe try and make it sound more smooth.... maybe u could use an acoustic or something more soft, maybe would have a cooler effect
#3February 26th, 2007 · 04:18 PM
371 threads / 187 songs
3,394 posts
United Kingdom
The Eq on the vocals are OK. Interestingly enough it may sound OK if you added some quality bass to the current eq setting??
#4February 26th, 2007 · 06:48 PM
151 threads / 150 songs
265 posts
United States of America
Eh, it is an acoustic guitar, it just sounds odd because of the EQ and the fact that its not a very good guitar.
#5March 3rd, 2007 · 09:54 PM
16 threads / 15 songs
44 posts
United States of America
I like it eq'ed like this, sounds lo-fi. I like your vocals on this one a lot. I dig the harmony things during the last verse. I like how you incorporate the electronic elements into it. Overall, it's pretty cool.
#6March 5th, 2007 · 09:06 AM
8 threads / 8 songs
29 posts
Netherlands
What did inspire you, cause the lyrics are pretty heavy, add a classical instrument like a violin, makes it a bit softer, geetz rasarani & krishna
#7March 5th, 2007 · 10:58 AM
373 posts
China
some dual vocals or higher/longer vocals on the "we remember" break would be great....
like the vocals in the other bits... guitar and percussion
has a very cool sound...
actually, i like the lofi sound to it as well...
cool...rock on!


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