Well, just my luck that I got the flu and can't sing. I had the chorus of this song going through my head and I was forced to record it without lyrics and replace the singing with an annoying sine wave for now.

The song is mostly done for now, but the guitars are all slightly out of tune and the acoustic is out of time in some places. I will post the complete version once I get better and can sing.

Here are what the lyrics are going to be. The poetry read in the chorus is taken from Thanatopsis by William Cullen Bryan
VERSEI
What is life?
Is it only
An hourglass filled with sand
Life decays
Its astounding
How quickly it goes away
Away  it goes away
Every day is just another
Grain of sand in the hourglass
Forget the past
It all means nothing
CHORUS
(these lines spoken quickly, almost whispered)
 Yet a few days, and thee
The all-beholding sun shall see no more
In all his course; nor yet in the cold ground,
Where thy pale form was laid with many tears,
Nor in the embrace of ocean, shall exist
Thy image. Earth, that nourished thee, shall claim
Thy growth, to be resolved to earth again,
And, lost each human trace, surrendering up
Thine individual being, shalt thou go
To mix forever with the elements,
To be a brother to the insensible rock
And to the sluggish clod, which the rude swain
Turns with his share, and treads upon. The oak
Shall send his roots abroad, and pierce thy mould.

We live in a narrow house(background)
VERSEII
Cells divide
Like so much cancer
But only so many times
Memories last
For only a moment
Gone in the blink of an eye
We live in a Narrow house
We live in a narrow house
We live in a narrow house
Now
SOFT SECTION
Crawling babies
Running children
Angry governments
Kings and so many field hands
All met the same fate
It’s inescapable
Life decays
It goes away
It goes away
It goes away
REPEAT VERSE I
CHORUS II
Thou shalt lie down
With patriarchs of the infant world—with kings,
The powerful of the earth—the wise, the good,
Fair forms, and hoary seers of ages past,
All in one mighty sepulchre. The hills
Rock-ribbed and ancient as the sun,—the vales
Stretching in pensive quietness between;
The venerable woods—rivers that move
In majesty, and the complaining brooks
That make the meadows green; and, poured round all,
Old Ocean’s gray and melancholy waste,—
Are but the solemn decorations all
Of the great tomb of man.

We live in a narrow house(background)

I really like this, sometimes annoying sine vocal and all.
Do a good job on the lyrics, sort out your timing thang in the first half and you've got you're self a big song.
The sine sound makes me want to hear more of those types of sounds bobbing in and out. Would make it even trippier.

Yes, I would enjoy that, maybe near the end for a climax. Like the overall instrumental sound. Great job with this, no-doubt going to turn out great. I'll keep an ear out for it.

Cheers

WB

good and strong background music. you need a very strong vox on this.
yep out of tune and out of sync sometimes
And I would keep the sine synth sound to support the vocals. they sound cool

waiting for the final

Guitars are too distorted and out of the mix, you might want to try to layer them.
You might want to keep the sine wave in at some points, for a soundfont it kind of adds to that atmosphere (specially with that verb thing going on the parts).

Nice composition, if you tighten some things up along the production line (like you've pointed out the timing of the acoustic) this will sound very decent.

Just wondering, who are your influences?

Yes, that's why its unfinished. I think I am going to re-record both guitars and make them cleaner, less distorted and more in time. (The reason they are so off is because I recorded them seperate from everything else, with only a metronome and no backing music.

My influences are mostly grunge and post grunge groups from the 90's like Pearl Jam, Stone Temple Pilots, Soundgarden and Bush. I can't emulate any of their sounds though, so everything I write comes off as a weird mix of all.