Hey guys

here another idea

just pasted some general songs idea behind eachother

have no clue yet what a chorus and riff etc is...

no text or ideas about that either

any comment and help is welcome

greetings! Wisdom

its a nice lil catchy tune I think..Could use more instruments...keys..horns possibly...a light guitar in the background might suit this well also...some variation with the chords also  as far as a chorus(s)/bridge. add lyrics and vox..but this is a good start...it has possibilties...just need to be worked on...the foundation is good I think

Flyer

flash you're gone, and I'm so all alone.

flash, you're gone, I'm sitting here at home..

may I download it and give it a shot??

blessings,

Dan

son came in and I had to give him my immediate attention.. 
so I posted without rating again.. this one gets a little higher score...
not cause I want to try to add lyrics, just cause I really like the way
it comes to close to reggae mon...  with a hook like " think I'll take
a trip to paris and find what I can see" it will live true to the title..

if ya don't like my ideas, that's kewl too.. I have no problem with
personal and solo artistic endeavors.. so critiques can come easily
in someone having different ideas as to what their mind has for
specific lyrical expressions as well!!

blessings,

Dan

Cool ideas..  I would like to see what Blueyes comes up with...  Should be interesting...  As for what you have here now...  I like the reggae vibe, add some serious vox and some more tude, and it's reggae overload..  THat would be awesome... 
 
   JimK

Ya Mon Eire!
I feel the groove hope to here add ons on this soon I like what I hear.Great Mix