Just a game |
And then next one...and with a band. This is only a demo that I made with my fellow students, and it still needs little work. My lyrics and melody.....well no more buts, here it is.. little more rock
Just a game
by Miona
I canīt decide (I canīt decide)
I canīt decide what road to take
Should I forget the date we had when you wrote our names in the sand
I canīt fight (I canīt fight)
I canīt fight against these tears
When you wrote me a letter why I wasnīt the girl you dreamed at night
Was it love or just a game?
these kind of things makes me feel like insane
come on, come on, let me try
my hopes wonīt harm you, right?
What if I got another chance
would I take it and find romance?
Hey, Hey, let/hear me say
I miss you today
Chorus: Did you close your eyes when you kissed me?
Did you rise above?
And I taught that you missed me
when I was gone
I was wrong...
I just can lie ( I just can lie)
I just can lie here no more
Iīve been here īfore after when I caught you with another in my bed
Was it love or just a cruise?
these kind of things makes me feel like a fool
come on, come on, tell me the truth
are you fascinated by the youth?
2xChorus:
4x I was wrong...
2xChorus:
3x I was wrong...
Just a game
by Miona
I canīt decide (I canīt decide)
I canīt decide what road to take
Should I forget the date we had when you wrote our names in the sand
I canīt fight (I canīt fight)
I canīt fight against these tears
When you wrote me a letter why I wasnīt the girl you dreamed at night
Was it love or just a game?
these kind of things makes me feel like insane
come on, come on, let me try
my hopes wonīt harm you, right?
What if I got another chance
would I take it and find romance?
Hey, Hey, let/hear me say
I miss you today
Chorus: Did you close your eyes when you kissed me?
Did you rise above?
And I taught that you missed me
when I was gone
I was wrong...
I just can lie ( I just can lie)
I just can lie here no more
Iīve been here īfore after when I caught you with another in my bed
Was it love or just a cruise?
these kind of things makes me feel like a fool
come on, come on, tell me the truth
are you fascinated by the youth?
2xChorus:
4x I was wrong...
2xChorus:
3x I was wrong...
lol, sounds like teen punk rock, nicely executed. I like the chord progression of the chorus, mainly, and the way it is played. I can hear there's a great guitar tone in there, but the entire mixing is a bit off - this surely deserves some more attention yeah. The drum sounds muffled, missing high mid and high eq, can barely hear the cymbals, and too dominating in the lows. It seems only the voice has sufficient high mid and high frequencies, could be more to the front, and if the guitars can be eq'd sharper so they stand out more... hmm.. a lot of things really.... if it were possible I'd love to mix the tune for you... BUT - all in all I like it - nice demo, gets the feeling and idea across well enough, it's a tight construction and your voice is really good. Excellent drive, it's been playing in a loop for some time now and it keeps getting better and better... So, keep it up, I guess
ps. it's "decide"
ps. it's "decide"
Hey! |
I tink it is f****** awesome!
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i love the vox man this is great, i agree with puppets post but man this is awsome good job. i cant get over those vox..wow this song kinda remindes me of a relationship. whitch is GOOD songs are ment to tuch others you guys hit the nail on the head man, so i aword you a cookie! thats the first cookie ive given in at least a month
paperdoll
paperdoll
Nice job! Good to hear you singing with a band...overall, I like the song...it's well constructed...the playing is tight, your vox are strong...I agree with Puppet that the mix is off, and my only other suggestion would be to get those back-up vox/harmonies in tune a little more (but that's just a personal preference...alot of this type of music has discordant sounds)
Oh,If I could make a song like this...I would be very happy:) I always knew - there are many interesting crazy people(in a good meaning) in Finland.! Super-song. your voice reminds me of Pink. It's angry and catching!
cool song. good quality.
the style is not my personal preference... but this is extremely well done.
mix could use some work. well, at least the drums. hard to hear. no presence. no punch.
but, sounds like a tight band. keep it up.
the style is not my personal preference... but this is extremely well done.
mix could use some work. well, at least the drums. hard to hear. no presence. no punch.
but, sounds like a tight band. keep it up.
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