An attempt at some trent reznor-ish stuff,
fruity loops my guitar and some cheap mics.

I thought the music you've put together sounds brilliant...love the sound textures...the weak points are the lyrics...they just don't seem strong enough..edgy enough..to go with the music.  And I'd like to hear the vox done edgier as well...and maybe add some heavy effects on them...just some suggestions, hope it helps.