sounds like a good start...but, you're right about about it being rough.  The mix is pretty awful, and guitar sounds out of tune at times and I can barely hear the vocals.  But - I do like the song  I like the change at :31, and I love the ending.  Clean it up some and I think you'll have a pretty good tune. 

well yeah. i'd like some critique from the experts before i make the actual release right ? so thanks. any other comments from other members would be definitely appreciated of course.

hey psychobunny!!

I like this song, to be specific, the song's idea.

I agree with spoony about the quality, but once you have clear that, I hope you can remake it.

The changes brings another perspective to feel the song, please keep it when you re-do it.

About the charity album i want to sent my best wishes to make it possible!

Cheers,

Dodo

Rather interestingly, on mine there are no basses and background sounds.

Thanks !! ^^

i do agree tha idea of this song is very good, but the quality is a bit on the awful side.

looking forward to hearing the cleaned up version, and good luck with the charity album!!!