Hi there!

This is my first rock song...it doesnt have a title and lyrics, ill write this soon.
I want you people to put any comments about the structure of the melody.

Thank you so much.

it's a good job.....

but i cant really tell about the structure cuz there are no words...sounds fine to me

oh and the melody is great! i like the break at 3:13

sounds pretty rockin!  Structure sounds fine, but it is hard to tell without lyrics.  Add some 

Err, no comments on the things you spacificly asked for.
Actually, I like the melody. It's pretty cool.
But yer, the whole mix is full of treble. I imagine this isn't a mager problem for an unfinished tack...just saying...
KI

man i really like this. the intro into the song is awesome as is the whole song.

i like it when you come into the distortion from the plucking at around 1:08, the progression there is good and one can feel the little bit of the dark touch to it.  

this is fun listening to. get some lyrics into it and things will turn out greater. i agree with moses. you gotta add more bass or let the bass guitar influence all the more. enjoyed the double bass and the off beats. can't wait to listen to the whole thing.

Nice guitars. Drum sounds are cool but a bit synthetuc. All in all a nice idea. Would like to hear some singing

Good guitar playing, really nice.
I agree with the fact that it does need a bass, it'll add depth.
I hope the vocals will be as good as the instrumental.
The structure is pretty clear, I mean where the verses and choruses go.
Looking forward to hearing the full version

absolutley love the chorus part, with real drumset and vocals this would be a fantastic song.

I can't see any structure going on here or any catchy riff or melody. The playing is tight though, and free of mistakes....the drums are very tight too...who is playing them??..lol.

No Bass                       
It would sound really deep, sensual, soulful with bass. I can tell that just from listening. And the riffier parts would sound great, too.
I can definitely see some structure here, if I understand what you mean by that.

I like the pauses, builds up a lot of tension, which is cool, and unusual in rock. Tight playing.

Very creative, very good, ADD BASS!!!!!