Ok, Um here's another one I just wrote. computer mic recording too. I'm recording it properly next week on wednesday Open E tuning.


FIRST VERSE

Sleeping would now be a treat,
As she walked through her living room.
Conscious of every creak,
As another day loomed.

Hoping that someone would find her,
Take her home and decide for her what she would do.

Morning came like a bag cement to the face,
Woke her awake from her awoken state in the first place.
Hoping that someone to keep,
Would come and put her to sleep at the end of her day.

CHORUS

She said "Hey, I am cold,
And I'm getting so old,
And I sometimes think...

"What I came here to find,
Is sure taking its time,
Does it matter? Should I settle?
And stay?"

2nd VERSE

Crimson in colour,
Her lips start to stutter a melody.
Fingers tap rhythms on tables,
Ordered and clean.

Hoping that someone would come by,
Accidently catch her eye.

CHORUS

She said "Hey, I am cold,
And I'm getting so old,
And I sometimes think...

"What I came here to find,
Is sure taking its time,
Does it matter? Should I settle?
And stay?"

- Chester

could be a great song if you would make more instruments to this thing. got a vote. But only for music and creativity. Not for quality

You are brilliant songwriter and singer!  The lyrics roll off the music so well and the texture is intricate.  I would love to hear the better recording to this song when you get done, but this song comes through so well even with the recording limitations.  Great flow into the chorus.  I love the way that your chord changes and lyrical content flow and change as to not get monotonus but yet retain continuity for the whole flow of the song.  Repetitive enough to lay foundation ,but not to get boring, changes and shifts evident enough to give freshness but not get so chaotic that the song has no synergy.  Extremely impressive.  Vocals also are excellent.

great song! do I hear a cello in there somewhere ?

 

Wow......wow.....whoah.  That was amazing.  I'm not a lyrics person, but I loved these.  And the guitar fit perfectly with them - loving the harmonics that you don't get to hear too often nowa days.  In terms of quality, I actually think it suits it the way it is right now.  Just re-record the vocals so they don't peak too much, and maybe in one or two places fix the guitar peaking but other than that I think the 'not-perfect' style fits brilliantly.

Amazing song - 90% just cos of the peaking.

nice musik

Classy stuff ...good luck with the album looking forward 2 it

Damn man another great song you really know how to create music where you love to listen to. I think here your vocals are better then in ways and means but that is just my opinion you need to do what feels right for you and like you're doing now it's pretty awesome keep on working at this kind of music you're really good in it