I need a little love
to keep me from fading
my mind keeps going blank
it's getting hard to stay awake
i'm fading

I need a guiding light
to lead me through this darkness
my smiles are all fake
can't bring myself to care
i'm fading

I need some kind of spark
to get my heart started
Im dead to the world
cant even feel my own pain
i'm fading

[ mumblel ]

A: "It's better than getting hurt. Better than loving someone and finding out that its not going to last. Feeling nothing is better than getting my heart broken."

B: "I have to snap out of it. This can't go on. Absence of pain is not enough. I wanna be happy. I'm not gonna fade away like this."

A: "It's no use. Wy should I try again when all I do is get hurt. It always end in pain. Dreams and hopes just turn to ashes."

B: "I want to feel again. To laugh and smile and feel my heartbeat race. To touch warm skin. I want to fly to the sun."

A: "Why do I keep dreaming? I will just hurt myself again. Like last time. Like the time before that. Like every time."

This has loads of potential! Maybe would like to hear some soft brushed snares in the back through-out the first part....

The heavier part...I thought the strumming of the rhythm guitar could have had a little more punch...play less strokes..but emphasize them more...

Another suggestion might be restructure it a little...do the first two verses..then go into the heavy part...then come back to the quieter section and end with the third verse.

Good job! Can't wait to hear some more! 

I tend to agree with Spoony - but I'd only bring the drums in at about 0:39 then have them more intense at 1:15 to build up the energy within the early part.  That way the heavy bit doesn't jump out quite so much, but rather the whole song leads you there.

This is a good bit of music though.  I enjoyed listening

A Very good idea this is. Definately something a lot of people (men, atleast ) can identify with.

The clean guitar part could use tightening up, and you could take more time to do the second part... And yeah the first three verses in a row is a bit demanding to the listener's ear.

And also, for the second part, you could be even more elaborate, with more voices and lines coming in as a huge build-up to the end... With synths in there... Anyway whatever - - this HAS loads of potential!

so yeh.. good luck with it