hehe ok the a cupella thing is back and for all of you wondering what hte music will be like this is it exept i want it to be a bit slower (with my vocals) hehe battlecat and i got the idea for this song at the beginning of the month and ive been fiddiling around with the vocals this is him singing and doing the music (just a rouph draft to get the idea)

and after he made this hard copy i chandes the lyrics a bit so here they are injoy! (hes gonna kill me for this!)


You’ve suffered a loss
You’re feeling left out
River of tears
An ocean of doubt

Taking some time
To ease your mind
The faith of love
And peace you will find

Ohh…Ohh
Ohh

When all is in doubt
And no one’s around
Look in the mirror
Answers are found

Believe in yourself
Look deep inside
The answers are there
Let your heart be your guide

Ohh…Ohh
Ohh…

Don’t get yourself down
It’s okay to cry
This, too, will pass
You just have to try

Don’t put yourself down
Don’t ask yourself “why?”
The love of one’s self
Is never a lie?

Ohh…Ohh
Ohh…


Don’t get yourself down
It’s okay to cry
This, too, will pass
You just have to try


Don’t put yourself down
Don’t ask yourself “why?”
The love of one’s self
Is never a lie

Ohh…Ohh
Ohh…

Ohh…Ohh
Ohh…

liked the ohh ohhh.....

yeah this is good!!!!

really..good
well hyp told me abt you ....

i am the other half of the band ...now i broke up....

the guitar parts are also good...

but i guess there is some problem with the timing...!!!!!

hey chiprokker....

what are you talking abt man....
everything is good!!!!
yeah...
the song is well structured...
and i am sure that PAP you havent done the dirty part???

so well just i would agree abt the timing....
its not up to mark...
but yeah its great song!!!

hope to listen to it in your voice...

-Aks

Now then Pappy......
....just got back off holiday and the little ones were so excited to see what had become of their song...
 Oh MY Lord...you cant begin to imagine the joy and satisfaction on their faces reading the posted comments and then getting to yours.....i thought they were going to have an accident or something, throwing themselves around shouting "Yo" to one another...
   Here at the lab we like it a bit different and this did the job for us after a week in a tent in some Welsh Valley.....strange, it sets something off in me i cant quite put my finger on but makes me glow....Roger Whitticker's cover of "Clouds" does exactly the same thing....my mallard said it makes him want to fly.....and believe me, thats saying an awfull lot....lovely, lovely, lovely....heres our vote and we will see you about soon....Peace.
   P.s.....for about twenty Dollars my mice are ready to stick their little fleeces on, jump in a box and travel airmail to do their number live at your party....imagine what all your friends would say?

Ya don't hear songs in 5 on the amp very often, so points for that!
I think if you plan to do this a cappella, that will actually make it better since the only gripe I have is that it's rather too reptitive for such a simple melody to be very powerful. I think that , stripped down, this song will benefit from the intimate nature of unadorned voices.
I would say in that case,  slowing it down a notch as you say might make it even better. It will be cool to see where you go with it in any case. Nice job so far.

A pretty good start I think. I'm a big fan of quirky time signatures so that's a good point for me.
As to the structure, I would suggest that a song of this type might need a chorus or instrumental focal point to break the repetetiveness of the verse, bridge, verse, bridge thing. The breakdown with the tiny guitar part is nice- would like to hear more of this. The guitar sounds great.
Overall, you have the bare bones of a catchy little tune- just needs fleshing out somewhat.
Good luck

a bit repetetive yes, but boy do i love those 'ooohaaahs'!

i vote for a slowdown, think it works better

a chorus would be great too

so curious how this will end up!

It's a good song - yes, a little repetitive in the vocal delivery.  But it's a draft version you say so there's chance to change it.
Pap - you now have to get on a do your stuff.  I'm looking forward to hearing how you sing this one

Boo! Don't fade, end your music strong! er, thats it 

this is killer stuff, i like the vibe.  i aggree, the chorus "ohhs" sound awesome, keyboard a little loud during solo part, otherwise, kick ass.  i will listen to more.

hypnotic and elegant, like it. jack

nice recording...good vocals  Cat...only thing though is it seems a lil repetitve(To Me)...but this does go well ...very nice music construction...and Cat your right on key...vey very nice

Flyer

like it, but certainly making it slower would allow to get more emotion in the vox. no offence but it sounds like hes reading the lyrics from paper as he goes.  . the melodys are nice tho.

I liked this alot!


Great Job!


John