I just wrote this song about the French resistance during the occupation in WW2. Or maybe it's about the U.S. in the 21st century. I guess it's both. It's pretty poppy but I'm trying not to write so many love songs and this was something I always wanted to do since hearing Elvis Costello's Armed Forces. WW2 was such a huge experience shared by nearly all of humanity, you'd think there'd be more mainstream music written about it. i think probably that generation just wanted to forget it.
Anyway, thanks for listening. Post a message and let me know what you think.
David

Here are the lyrics:


Three Day Weekend

We meet tonight at nine beneath the banner we designed so we can
plot our next assignment out in full
Nobody has a clue so far of what we do or who we are
this underground rebellion stuff is cool

By day we hand out pamphlets at the mall
At night we fight the good fight
as we climb beyond the wall

And the barriers will down as we pass the word around and it will spread
from town to town and state to state       
But the councils of the kings are such they aim too low yet risk too much
Their national past-time’s tempting fate

Let’s synchronize our watches and move in
We’re shadows in the night
we leave no trace of where we’ve been

HOOK:
And maybe they’ll dedicate a day to us
And we’ll call off school
for a three day weekend
There’s nothing that anyone can say to us
Cause we did our duty
as we saw fit

The lie detector knows your lies so just stay on your toes you guys
remember not to compromise your friends
It never shoud have come this far but there you go and here we are
but I’ve got your back until the end

Let’s synchronize our watches and be gone
We’ll be the ones our families and friends depend upon


HOOK:
And maybe they’ll dedicate a day to us
And we’ll call off school
for a three day weekend
There’s nothing that anyone can say to us
Cause we did our duty
as we saw fit

great song.

only problems, sounded like the vox weren't quite in tune with the instruments near the beginning. also (and this might just be my personal preference) I thought everything sounded too clean and plucky. it would have been nice to hear some sort of instrument with a more sustained sound.

anyway, besides the technical stuff... playing was good. the song was nice. good lyrics.

and... the "HOOK" was definitely a hook... wonderful. backing vox perfect.

heh, I could name a few people here who wouldn't like the ending... but I think it's fine!!!

Thanks Tak
Yeah the ending isn't really a fade but I just recorded it this afternoon and wanted some feedback. I haven't gotten around to ending it 'though I have the arrangement. I definitely have to re-do the vox. They blow.

The vocals are a little off in places, but I think that gives the whole song loads of character - actually, it reminds me of Todd Rundgren / Utopia. 
The chorus/hook is fabulous - great harmonies
Instrumentally, I think it sounds spot on as far as the choice of sounds - I'd like to see a little more punch from the bass though.  It's a great bass line that gets lost a little.

Construction wise, it's excellent.

That'll be me then!!!

Great work though Alerion.  Another one of yours to download.

Hey Jim
Thanks for listening to this. I'd like to re-submit this song with the changes I've made but I'm not sure if it's drastic enough a change to avoid getting in trouble. To begin with, I've started actually mixing it so it should sound alot better (and I'll bring the bass up too).
I took Takaminer bb13's advice and added a long-tone instrument to tie it together. I used an accordian to evoke the Parisian vibe. I like the effect though the part may need tweaking.
I also cleaned up the lead vocals and added a lot to the BG vox on the hooks. And I gave it  a solo and a better ending. It's still a fade but a better one.
I confess i don't understand the aversion to fades. They are, to me at least, as important an ending device as any. Admittedly they're used a lot but I think that's because they work alot. Anyway, I'll post it sometime tonight or tomorrow.
Thanks again for listening and thanks for the advice .