This Is My personal favourite, it has a U2 kinda of feel to it. one band, which im really inspired by.  I Made this on "garageband" by mixing different sounds together, just basically exsperimenting, then there was a section, which i loved and i just kept addind and adding on to it. i have put about 6 different Instruments in to this piece. and my own guitar. i just had to put some guitar in to it. ^^ Hope you like enjoy this.

it's sooo short! and that's a shame, because it starts out real nice, and the soundscape it great.

I'd love to hear full lenght tunes coming from you.. it seems you have some good ideas on how things should sound...

so, get going! ...

very nice - but too short!!

Yeh i know things r too short, but im having trouble trying to lengthen my music. i try to add more on, but i feel like im ruining it. if u know what i mean

I have the same problem because I can't sing! Oh I've tried...actually I am trying, so maybe we can make a support group together. Vocals in my mind naturally add all the length you need because they become the focus (the story the words the sounds whatever). I'm having a lot of fun trying anyways...you should too!

This song is very nice, but to short, to short. You have good ideas, and sense of developing 
things.

I woud gladly love to hear a full song....

does size really count?mmmmmm Some times a short good idea in this medium ....instant internet works better than some thing longer ,in the real commercial world some people make a fortune out of writing 30 second pieces    Go garage band ,even hear loops from garage band on very established artists new tracks hahaha . reminisant of heros david bowie but there aint nothing wrong with that , you can get away with murder on 2 chords.

Cinematis overall .

what a great intro...............................

I am looking forward to the outro.......
and the middle bit 
your recording and use of instruments sounds great

lol

the fish
p.s.   dont be afraid to use this idea as the 'bed' for a song .......... its great

The start is great - it's a fabulous build up of instrumental sounds; I like that.
The recording's good
The mix is good
The playing is good
The song disappears into oblivion because it never really gets going.  A pity coz it certainly sounds like it could be excellent.
So you need to finish it

I really like where you are going with this. It has a nice feel to it and is well worth extending. You have a talent and I can't wait to hear more from you.