I went to see marilyn manson @ the wiltern here in Los Angeles,CA this year 2006.  Swear to gawd, Im walkin to my seat and Adam fuckin Jones from TOOL is just standing there right next to me!  TOOL is a one of kind and my fav band. I was so inspired by him I wrote this song. Im really proud of it.

This is fucking amazing! Are you in a band?If not get on it and start making some music,I here endless possibilities for this with a full band.Only thing I don't like is the distorted guitar(no crunch (high end)   all low end.Was it intentional? Well keep up the good work and keep post'n.

This is the kind of stuff that got me playing guitar in the first place.Thank you for reminded me how fun and how much of an escape playing is.

Yes, I'd like to hear a full band version of this; could be great.  Tight guitar playing.

This reminds me to opteh a little bit (wih is really good)

Really good Randy....yep, as the others said it would be great to hear a full blown version of this, with drums, bass, vox etc.

On the song itself, I might've liked to hear the heavier part come in a little earlier (instead of at 1:15, maybe try around :26) then shorten up the :26-1:14 part and plunk it somewhere around 2 min.  then come out of it into the 2 min onwards stuff. Just an idea for you....

Great guitar playing!

This is really good!  It really blew me away!  Keep it up!  ( by the way, you are too lucky to have been standing next to Adam Jones)

great job randy...
well done....

your going to win the battle with this song mate, keep it up


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This is definately a great driving guitar part, but like other have said it wouldn't hurt to cut the intro a bit short. A simple drum part would help alleviate this if your heart was set on the longer intro.

Hope to hear a full band version of this sometime.

oh I love the effects in the guitar.

WIth a full band it would be great, especially with vocals. This is exactley the kind of style I like.

Keep it up man!

Pretty good - but it seems empty to me without other instruments in there too.
The recording and mix is spot on.
Playing's very tight - nice
To my ears, this track is crying out for a decent thrumming bass, power-drums, and vocals.
As others have suggested - a full band backing would make it great!

Not bad man,  keep up the good work

Nice guitar work.
You need some drums, bass and vox.
I don't like the guitar sound... to digital ( may be I'm not the proper person to say that, but now I realize).
But once again, good composition.

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This may be incorrect, but the heavy distortion sounds like mine does when I try and run a high-gain pedal straight into my mixer (the BOSS MT-2 for example).  The riff sounds like it would be awesome, if you just got the distortion nailed/recorded right, whichever be the case.

to me this is a far from finished song but the riffs are really awesome
intro is too long maybe? or is it the lack of drums?
i agree about the distorted guitar sound, could be improved, less saturating/digital/bzzz sound?
i like the driving feel in some parts, and the little tool influences
love to hear a full band version!

EDIT: would be nice to hear the clean guitar from the intro in the outro again?

But this is not a finished song... this is a nice start though...

   declare peace on this,  Get this finished, then put it back in the battle as  a complete song...  this is just not ready...

             JimK