#1July 2nd, 2006 · 01:32 PM
119 threads / 90 songs
258 posts
United Kingdom
Sinking Heart
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This song is not in a battle


i'd rather be drifting lost at sea,
without a compass or map,
with nowhere to be.
but i'm here anchored to a town,
with nothing to do except,
keep sinking...

down.
i'll keep sinking down.
i'll keep sinking...
its hard to see the silver lining
on this cloud.
i let you down,
and they let you down,
we're all sinking...
cracks in the pavement swallow souls
in this town.

this heart upon my sleeve,
its always in the way.
if i was sea worthy i'd,
sail so far away
your heart upon the waves,
is heavy with the rain,
if i came to bail you out,
would you sail with me again?

i guess we'll remain strangers,
riding many storms on different seas,
but our currents have colided here,
your eyes have brought me to my knees,
i'm sinking...

down.
i'll keep sinking down.
we'll keep sinking...
i want to make you smile and come around
but i've killed it now
i let you down,
and you brought me down,
we're both sinking...
i've seen that i missunderstood you.
and i've killed it now,
before it ever was,
now it'll never be
before it ever was
now it'll never be

you will find a seaworthy
ship, you will sail away
something you can love and trust,
until your dying day
this heart upon my sleeve,
keeps me bound this way.
my heavy heart is pulled appart,
i'm sinking.

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#2July 2nd, 2006 · 02:28 PM
7 threads / 2 songs
23 posts
United Kingdom
I like this sound
Goldfrapp in laid-back mode. Or am I way off??
#3July 2nd, 2006 · 03:30 PM
121 threads / 56 songs
3,098 posts
Netherlands
okay, you definately put some more attention to this one.

so, great vocal work, those harmonies are great.

I do think that this song has a lot of words... crowded with (your lovely) voice, however personally I'd prefer some more instruments-only parts... you could build this tune into 8-minutes like, make it something really big, with the catchy "(I'm) sinking down" as a hook.

so .. . . . . great vocal work - - - could use a bigger, longer instrumental track to put them to... yeah, I think that's it, from my view.

btw, nice piano
#4July 11th, 2006 · 04:29 PM
55 threads / 30 songs
1,558 posts
United Kingdom
I really love the mental images that this one conjures up for me.  I can picture someone sinking deeper and deeper in the ocean as the song progresses. It's great.

You piece together your great vocals with the instrument sounds extremely well - I don't agree with PX about it being crowded with your voice; I think the lyrics are delivered really well, and they fit well with the music accompaniment, and paint the image I describe above.

This is good work once again.

#5July 28th, 2006 · 06:32 PM
48 threads / 7 songs
429 posts
United States of America
i really love this song, dont know why so much but it really relaxes me, and i like singing to it, kinda makes me sit back and think about stuff, and as always your unique voice really brings out th evocals for this, good job my doll friend

your dolly cousin
paperdoll
#6December 22nd, 2007 · 05:19 AM
1 threads / 1 songs
10 posts
Sweden
In my humble opinion...
The best potential so far

“...it’s hard to see the silver lining on this cloud.” Nice image. It gives a nice contrast to “see” and "sinking"… What do you mean by “this cloud”? Wouldn’t be ok with just “cloud”?

+
Harmonies.
The rhythm you singing in. It falls just on right place.
Metal thing in the background

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Not to match =)
Drums could be a bit more discreet (steeling attention to match)
Arrangement… I would do it in a more “minimalistic” maner (ush my English)
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