this is a simple short song, done a few years ago the day i had my wisdom teeth out (ouch!)

Perhaps want to have a positive crittic,..well,..as you say yourself :its to short.
Guitars could be some more in the beat(sounds like a bit delayed).
Nice voice you got,..and good luck to you all.

yeh guitars are a bit off in the beginning...

actually, everything sounds a bit loose, but it's not really a bad thing imo... it's not too loose in other words.

I really like the vox, and lyrics... at least the ones I can understand. can you post them?

nice one.

I knew a girl once she was on the telephone
Talking malicious intentions
Then the phone swallowed her up (x2)
But it made me feel whole again
Because her hate was gone
Because she was gone

Down on the corner there's a paper boy selling
Selling his wares his life his soul
But he doesn't see the sky (x2)
But it made me feel whole again
Because his pride is gone
'Cause I can't see the sky neither

Alligator Annie, from where nobody knows
She eats my mail every morning
But she's not just inside my mind (x2)
She's knows that I'm whole again
Because her blindness is gone
Gone to the fire that haunts us all

energetic rock - good music is when I feel myself sitting in the structure of the wood that the instruments were carved from

nice nice nice! I can see a video to this, really casual street kindof thing - and a well chilled, tasty beer!

cheers !

Hey...the actual recording quality on this one seems to be better than your others?  Everything sounds very bright and clean, and well mixed.  There is the guitar timing issue that has already been mentioned...but I do agree that it's okay for this type of funky loose music.

I have to say, that I really like your lyrics, I think they're among the best on here.  Poetic but not too sloshy, interesting words and rhymes all around.  It seems that there is always a message in your songs, but you write it in such a subtle way that is not too obnoxious or "in your face" - which is great!     And your voice...beautiful.

I would pay money to see you in concert...so get out there!!!

This is almost funk.

If you had a groovier bassline, and changed up the drums, this would be funk.

I really like your voice.  It's funky.  This is my first review on this site...I'm on a search for funk.

I think you should make an album.  I would buy it. 

Nice, very nice!

The recording is better - mix is decent, sound quality pretty good (although there's still something not quite right, a bit like you're playing in a box!)

It doesn't detract from what I think is a really decent song.

If I were to re-do this one, I think I'd add more punch to the rhythm guitar and bass so that they cut through a little more.  I'd also add a short instrumental bridge (yeah, I know it's cliched, but it would work) and make the track a little longer.

Your vocals are great, as ever.

I gave my vote and just wanted to say... I like it!!!

beautiful voice, even after getting your teeth out

I like the tune  even if it is short...your voice is amazing...love it Spoony

Ralph

MAy I say....

      THis is pretty cool

              Very nice flow....  I can see my groovin with a nice cold drink... watchin ya'll on stage playin this one.... 

             Jim K