Had a quite disturbing encounter a few days ago. Made me think, this is the result.
It's acoustic and a very simple song.
I know that you probably won't listen to it a second time, because I can't sing - but that's just what I feel. So it wouldn't be honest to let it sing another person.

Now I know that this is Goodbye
you knew it before I knew
this is the last day we spend together
in the sun that changed
into a twirling winter storm

you hold my hand
you kissed my lips
now I know it's true
you said:
"you can save my life forever"
now I know it's true
It's a lie
It's a lie
now I know it's true
It's a lie
It's a lie
everything about you

Now I feel the coldness on my skin
willow trees aren't evergreen
like every summer has its end
say goodbye to your Never Never Land

you hold my hand
you kissed my lips
now I know it's true
you said:
"you can save my life forever"
now I know it's true
It's a lie
It's a lie
now I know it's true
It's a lie
It's a lie
everything about you

Not a bad song........guitar on the muddy side.

all on one mike?

hope your love life picks up soon.

i voted too

Hmmm, that's a hard one to comment on. As you said, this has to be appreciated more as a story of what you were feeling at a particular time in yr life than anything else. It's higly depressive, which makes it geniuine. I listened to the whole thing so you are not that bad a singer. Well, but it did make me feel a bit down...

Rated this one

Jim

I think you created an excellent tune with this. The feeling is very strong, very atmospheric, the quality is crisp, the lyrics very real.

Nice, nice play on those guitars...

pass the inflatable on a sea of tears...

Don't hear the "muddy" guitar as Swordfish does.  I like the quality of the recording, and the overall construction.

Do I also get the feeling that it's not a very happy song!

Hey thank you guys, all the comments on my song(s) really helps me. I try to review as much as I can and I'm sorry if I left someone of you out. Maybe you understand that it's hard for me to write something helpful in English because I'm used to speak German, and of course it's difficult because almost all songs here are better than mine.

I do not always feel that bad and I think it's getting better

I like that song!
You are the best!

whee.........

This is alright man!!

          I like it....... I really can feel this song.......

                    I am not sure what musicalmaiden meant by whee, but ok....

                           I find it very real, and very believeable.... I actually felt pain...

                                      I weep for you......
                         
                                                  Jim "slowhand" K

I'm feelin it.

The out-of-tune lyrics actually add to the depressing tone of the song. I like it.

nice soft song
need to increase the volume of the guitar
lyrics are nice and the picking is also nice

It's really good. The guitar is gd i quite like the fact that the song is not 100% perfect it makes the sog better as life is not 100% perfect as you seem to know