This is my second song, your comments helped, and i hope this song is better!

very nice lyrics...keep workin 

there's some expression coming from your voice that I do like. For me the music isnt that good. Sounds like you're escaping. lyrics are nice.

that background synth is way to soft, but that's the least that should be remixed 
Liked your voice a lot, sung very well too, nice melodies!
the songstructure could be better, or arrangements could enhance things a bit,
but a nice try! now make a convincing good song of it!

Your voice is very nice; Madonna-esque in parts. There are a few mistakes in the vocals which tend to stand out all the more because this is very much a vocally driven song.

I quite like the song structure. Nice melody and vocal arrangement IMO.

The music itself is lacking but as a vehicle for your voice it does okay.

Promising song.

Hey, you have a nice voice, so sing it out!  And I do agree the supporting instruments could be louder in the mix... and the detuned guitar just isn't doing it for me.  But yeah, keep it up, I wanna hear more.

Marg
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check out "marula"

this song is definately better (thanks to the drums)

your voice sounds more confident. I like that chord progression... nice lyrics, again your voice is stronger - and true the arrangement is skeletal, but it works.

so keep it up

I rated this song nicely