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#1January 16th, 2006 · 10:00 PM
48 threads / 41 songs
144 posts
New Zealand
A Name Like Tobleron
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This song is not in a battle


It's "A Name Like Toblerone" it just wouldn't fit it all in.

I wrote aobut this woman down our hill who is like 30, but looks about 70. Sad sad story. So I wrote this song. Which probably has nothing to do with her, but was inspired by her.

VERSE 1:

Severed fingernails beneath the teeth she bites them with,
A silver bangle dangling from her wrist.
Knuckles white and hard from years of smoking cigarettes,
She doesn't have that long (I think you get the gist)

She's a sinker,
On a fishing wire.

VERSE 2:

She's this crooked little easel of a girl,
Clumps of hair they tear and fall about the place.
And when she smiles (which isn't often, and it takes a while)
It's like her lips against the grain of her face.

She's a sinker,
And she's cast away.

VERSE 3:

She has a name because her mother called her Toblerone,
She has a dog which she just calls Dog.
And when it yelps it coughs and splutters through the living room,
And wades its way into the niccotene fog.

She's a sinker,
She's a sinker,
She's a sinker,

And she's sinking down,

Here.

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#2January 16th, 2006 · 10:11 PM
117 threads / 55 songs
1,541 posts
Chile
Just Beautiful!
Don't know what to say man, but just that you are awesome!
Keep this up...gonna make a CD with your music.

      > Iszil
#3January 16th, 2006 · 10:17 PM
117 threads / 55 songs
1,541 posts
Chile
Oh, get to Chat room, so then I can talk with the genius.

      > Iszil
#4January 17th, 2006 · 04:33 AM
38 threads / 36 songs
118 posts
Italy
Great lyrics and a beautiful song.  Your talent shines right through it.  I will have to listen to all of your songs now.
#5January 17th, 2006 · 06:29 AM
5 posts
Norway
Yes, Beautiful, Man you're talented....and as i said before  you really have a nice voice...another masterpiece from you
#6February 1st, 2006 · 05:14 PM
158 threads / 13 songs
2,304 posts
United Kingdom
re: A Name Like Tobleron
very very nice

emotion beautifully transferred

thank you

i'll never look at the wife in the same way

dives into a vat of remorse
i have a name very like toblerone!!!
splosh

the fish
#7February 2nd, 2006 · 01:56 PM
3 threads / 3 songs
10 posts
Canada
We have a few local open stages where I live. Come and play for us. Please!

A very simple song, lovely melody and lyrics and tasteful guitar playing. Nicely done.
#8February 2nd, 2006 · 06:42 PM
102 threads / 59 songs
204 posts
Canada
Beautiful. Really nice melody great vocals... need to hear more.
#9February 4th, 2006 · 02:28 PM
160 threads / 88 songs
1,666 posts
United States of America
Very beautiful....

   Absolutely perfect.... can't say enough good about it....  I could feel this song....

   You really made a grade A perfect song here......
                           JimK
#10February 6th, 2006 · 05:17 PM
5 threads / 5 songs
327 posts
United Kingdom
ok i automatically sang along
you have talent and i like you, aaawww.
#11February 8th, 2006 · 12:43 PM
sweeeet!
top notch song! smooth and original.
#12February 9th, 2006 · 08:29 PM
24 threads / 9 songs
284 posts
Mexico
thanks for give a chance to find new places in this big world. I like the music and the lyrics, really thank you, great song
#13February 10th, 2006 · 06:55 AM
8 posts
Denmark
Incredible song EG - you're really talented!

I love the sound of the guitar and your voice - is it recorded live? It's just that sometimes it sounds like you turn your mouth a little away from the mic, maybe to look down on the chords?!? - don't know if it's so, just a thought.

I also really dig your lyrics - you really master the technique of "Don't tell it - show it" - you use the melody like a canvas a portraits this woman to the listener - and very effectively - I'm impressed.

Would really love to hear it produced with more instruments... hope you have a some guys around you, so you can play your songs with a backing band.... Then all you need is a live audience and you're reaching for the stars...

I'm getting chills that reminds me of early John Mayer...

Kazpa
#14February 21st, 2006 · 01:37 PM
48 threads / 41 songs
144 posts
New Zealand
Thanks everyone

Early john mayer?! Awesome.

- Chester
#15February 27th, 2006 · 12:33 PM
3 threads / 3 songs
11 posts
Canada
Great!!!
Bingoed my mood man!
I wanted to hear something soft and you gave me it...
the song is so beautiful...
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