I wrote this song after and cop pulled me over for not wearing my seat belt.  Its a good song though.  Its a reflection on life as it is in the 21st century.

Tell me what you think thanks.

Bastard cops  .....but wearing seatbelt is for your own good....Nice song...I like the melody.

Good work man. I'd take that flanger off though. That shit's nasty

nice tune man, nice and catchy, but agree with the flanger, its cool but dont think it suits the song,

like to hear some more tunes!

I really like the way your voice and chords compliment eachother, you know where your key lies and you optimize your performance , great job

nice work.
I think you could try a more complex rhythm for the guitar or some harmonies to make it more interesting. overall, great song.

The lyrics didn't really flow

lasers, vision, fail to see... mmmmmmm

The only advice I can give is to listen to Pink Floyd, during Roger Water's phase of good writing, nearly a decade in duration... but not Roger's solo stuff... no no no

Beutifull song - i love a straight forward strum with a strong melody - great singing. I love your creativeness here ( with the voice ). I belive, as long as there is a lead in polyphony then we can ignor a complexity of one part and listen to the polyphony.

I would like to read the lyrics

i think one really great thing we can hear in this track is some melodys in the vocals to bring a bluesy or grassroots sound.
I still love it though!

A+++

very nice voice. i thought the guitar was good but maybe stop playing it at one point and just have voice (maybe several layers) only.

Somebody wanted to read the lyrics so here they are.  Also LeVee I fail to see what you meant about the lyrics not flowing Lasers fix our vision and yet we fail to see seems to make perfect sense to me.  However I agree with you about roger waters being a great song writer.

Does it even matter?
If we lose or win
We live in days that
Have never been lived in
Now not being safe
Is some kind of sin
Fasten your seat belt
They might haul you in

You better license your pet
Is this the worst road yet?

Now rock & roll is
Made in Hollywood
And cheap computers
Do what DJ�s should
Your watched from the sky
So you better be good
You want to turn back
Oh if only you could

As the sun starts to set
Is this the worst road yet?

Our time is devoured
By time saving machines
Living in cyberspace
But we forget to be
Lasers fix our vision
And yet we fail to see
As knowledge increases
We let wisdom go free

Your wheels are all wet
Much to all our regret
Your inclined to forget
This is the worst road yet

I like the layered vocal idea. That would make this song even better. Still good, good melody that optimizes your voice.

Very good lyrics!.
Would work a bit more on the guitar strumming.

"Lasers fix our vision and yet we fail to see seems to make perfect sense to me"

it makes sense... as does
"Our time is devoured
By time saving machines
Living in cyberspace
But we forget to be," but that stuff is pretty cliche...
however, since you posted the lyrics, I can see the rest of the song is pretty well written... You should post the lyrics in the Lyrics forum page... I can't offer any help... i suck at lyrics