its a small piece. It sounds a little discontinuous but it was intended to be that way.
listen to it a couple of times, maybe you'll like it.

its a very different one you have here.
Interesting buildup but i'm not too sure about the transitions. Feels a little incomplete.
its too short. work on it a little more
There's a lot of potential

cheers!


ps: the second riff is very addictive. great work man!

You should invest in a guitar tuner.  

Not bad...nice Chord Progessions.  I would work on a more Melodic feel for that piece....but very nice!

ouch! 

actually its a bent neck, notes go off pitch when i pluck too hard.

Interesting ideas, and it kinda feels good to listen to. No melody to get in the way really. I agree about the tuning, and would add- try using a metronome, maybe with a headphone plug-in. Or if you have a nice computer editing system, you can artificially make the piece in-tune again.

RJ

actually its a bent neck, notes go off pitch when i pluck too hard.

that souldn't matter, if you take the time to tune it. try searching for a website called "Java Tuner"- its an online tuner i use if i lose my tuner

even if you have to borrow a mates guitar to record with, you really must sort out the tuning issues.  and yes, a bent neck does put the guitar out of tune - its called intonation and is nothing to do with how hard you pick (its just more noticeable when you play the note harder).  there's nothing more frustrating that a good song recorded out of tune - doesn't matter how good the song is, the audience are still not gonna enjoy it.  its a shame really.

i really think that you would benefit from separating up a coupla ideas in this one and developing them into two separate tracks.  compose a melody (whether vocal or instrumental) that doesn't over shadow your picking but will still add interest to the accompaniment, and try to work with a single idea by developing and changing them.  i think the crucial thing is that your music must sound like a conversation.  by that i mean that each section of a song should sound like your still talking about the same topic.  at the moment, this piece sounds like your saying "the weathers nice today" and then "the square route of 4 is 2" rather than "the weathers nice today" followed by "i think I'm going to go to the beach".

does that make sense?  its a hard thing to try and communicate in a message on a forum.  i just think that if you can understand that concept and apply it to your composition, it will help you dramatically.  keep at it.