This track has everything... except vocals. Feel free to skip around after listening to a bit of intro.
here are the (relatively) interesting parts:

1. 0:40 -intrumental chorus
2. 1:46 -breakdown/solo

i know there are problems with this track... but i want to see what you catch! feel free to make a list and be specific ( "dude, that sucks," doesn't qualify as specific, but if needs to be said...)

soon i will be recording at a new site, on a new computer, etc.
Thanks everyone!

wanted to follow both of the solos but was hard; guess u must listen the whole of the section and try to follow nothing. if the idea was to make a more filled solo, what i'd do is to make one solo, but faster ( i think is my obsesion for that: if u listen my songs u'll realize that they r olny one but fast-trying solo)
the idea is good, but donw like the guitars sound. feel them fake. i would add a bit of reverb or chorus in both guitar ( riff ans solo) to give more body to the tune; sounds quite "cut". but the idea is good. also i'd add vocal parts, just to make it more varying.
btw, i like the chords progression, but as i said, i' like the idea.

PS: need a strongest bass.

you're right about the solo: one (lead) guitar should work. i guess two guitars helps me compensate for my lack of skill.

i also like the idea of speeding up the pace of the song for the solo, and of course, i need a louder bass!

thanks for the response

Allo,

First off, it aint bad and be able to admit it to yourself! Dont worry about lack of skill and all that, we all wish we could play better than we can - its just the way we think. But look at heads like cobain, he could barely wrestle an axe and if it werent for the shotgun he might have taken over the world! Keep at it bud. Lay vocals and get it finished.

I agree with everything said here, but I just wanted to add that the timing is not all together in the beginning but it seems to have worked itself out by the second half. Keep at it, it could turn into something. Did you play all the instruments?

i played the guitars, wrote it, but drums are samples.

after recording this song, i got FL studio 5.0, and am gonna use that for all of my subsequent songs.

i dont make that much money with music, but  its getting better; iam the rythm guitarist and 21 years old.
So if you know some great gigs we will cross the ocean.

Greats Jeroen