A simple song to inspire weird dreams. Hear it and tell me.

cool progressive feel. i love the dissonance you achieve, creates kind of an apocalyptic feel. sounds just like an idea though, you should expand it, create more movements, add vocals ideally.

But I can't make my songs longer, though if you say that this one is progressive, I think that at least this one should be longer, it's just that I can't do it, it would sound repetitive.
About the lyrics... I don't like to sing and I haven't got a good singer, not even a decent one.
Do you have any recommendations?

Creo que el elefante merece una agonía más larga... 

daar versta ik geen barst van. volgens mij is dat ook niet echt de bedoeling...

(or: WTF? ... the Babel issue... tsk, tsk)

ok

In anyway, odd tune. Funny, yes, I wouldn't say it'll make my dreams weirder than usual, but I get the idea.

yea, very nice!

I like its simplistic nature how it built upon itself. If I had to suggest . . . I'd just say it should be longer. Good work.

Just because you asked it I'm working on a a longer version which will be completely different from this.
I hope to bring it to you in the next year.
Thanks to all of you for your comments.

completament volada la kncion, pero me gusta esa disonancia d ls tonos y notas. muy psicodelik, cn muxo feeling por detras, refleja perfectament la agonia dl... pobre, digamos, elefante. sigue cn eso, me gusta

PS: ten por seguro q no estas solo ak; habems artos latinos, y espero q ese tipo d gringos ( pq fue por el caso d Livadream q me enoje ya q hay gringos buena onda) no sigan en esta pagina, o se qeden callados.

TRANSLATION:

a completly "flying" song, but i like the distuning of the tones and notes. pretty psycodelic, with a lot of feeling, that reflex perfectly the... poor elephant agony. keep on with that, i like it.

(dont translate the PS cuz has nothing to do with the song)

molas un montón!
hoy he descubierto esta web y estoy disfrutando mucho y eres el primero a quien escribo.
voy a oir todas tus canciones, por ahora solo he oido dos, pero me gusta que existan cosas alternativas y el mundo sea variado.
en mi opinión no debes cambiar NADA en tu obra, a menos que te ofrezcan algo que tu necesites mucho; ¿lana? ¿pasta? (como decimos en españa)

te sigo, salu2 de un viejo(52) madrileño.

You've done a really good job with the panning and effects. The mix is really good, too. Were you using MIDI instruments? I like the sound that comes in at :26. It creates such a great sound for this song. The building of suspense and release is really tight, too. This is pretty cool.

the title really fits. Quiet surrealistic, I can imagine this one being a soundtrack to a psychedelic adventure game It is unfortunately too short, but i really liked it!

sounds intriging, but this has to get longer - just when i am getting comfy it ends - not good  
a sad david is a mad david.
anyways - is there a real guitar here? the first string sounds real - mayby not though - but just that should give you reason to do some more.

please please please oh please make it longer a repost.

Agree with mage11 - it gets going, and gets you interested... and then it stops!!!

I'd love to hear this as a longer track that goes off into a slightly different direction.  All in all, it's a pretty cool track though!

this song is pretty awesome! Keep going!

I tried but I couldn't improve it, so I guess that this will be its final version. The main problem was that I made this on six hours and then I lefted for a while, then I didn't know what to do, and it's the same now.
Anyway I think that it's good enough to remain that way.
Thanks for your comments. The sounds that comes at :26 is actually a 2 sec. long sample that i stretched to its actual duration, which I don't remember exactly, and the name of the song was tooked from it, yes, indeed.
Now I'm doing new stuff, this time I'm being more careful.
Bye.