This has a sort of grungy techno feel to it, the main keyboard riff is somthing i compsed for a school project but i thought it could be recycled into this, enjoy.

FF7 attacks!

er, nope, nope... wait, here comes the guitar...

the guitar on the breakdown at 0:46 is way way out of tune

the transitions between parts are very choppy, try to get them smoothed out

gets a little boring towards the end - that keyboard riff can only go so far... you need something else to spice up this tune, a "real" drum beat or some vox or more chords or something

the verdict: "needs work"