My second song (instrumental as well). need your comment guys.

Nice crisp sound

The drums sound pretty good in a spacial sense, not sure I like the snare though...consider  producing it differently or replacing it via a different sample or drumagog.

It's fairly catchy, I like the bass run and the guitar. However, as an instrumental piece there is no melody or 'hook' to speak of. It *really* needs vocals - or if you want to keep it instrumental I'd suggest adding a piano, more likely organ, or maybe even lead guitar.

Nice stuff, and I look forward to hearing more...

Yeah dave, i did  realized on the things that you've said . actually i got another version for this song whereas the drum play is more variable like what you've mentioned.

And regarding to put some vocals into this song, that was a great idea but the problem is, i was not good at singing or even create my own lyrics.


P/s : perhaps you could write one for me (kidding..he he!!)
 

I like the bass line!  and altough I had the feeling that something misses in your song (Dave mentioned)  the quality of your recording is really good..  I wish I could do that, Espacially I have some problem with drums... How Did you get  them into the song? 
Keep it on ;-)

thanx  for your comment, Amused



 i created this song ( most of my songs actually) with Cakewalk Home Studio. there is no real instruments were involved in the making of this song, my instruments are actually audio loops (certain people might think this is a shame, but for me as long as you honest to your music, it can comes from any direction not nescessarilly from real drums, guitar or any other established instrument ).

anyway thanx for listening to my song, really appreciate that

p/s : glad to see your reply soon..

sounds like the "tequila" song from the sixties. Can't remember the band, but the rhythms are similar. Really needs some kind of solo on top of the loop, as Dave said. Piano would be best in this case i would think. Maybe even trumpet(s) Catchy stuff

I found myself smiling while listening to this. Good first start. And listen to Dave, he knows of what he speaks.

Cool.. This song sounds "fun", I like

this is such a happy song all i can do is smile, there really is no melody here, unless you call what the drums are doing a melody... anyway its cool mad stuff to do when you are bored

This would go great on a movie background soundtrack quite well. Maybe you should consider pitching your music to the movie industry?! Just a though.

The band was the Champs... anyway... yeah I agree it does have a Champ-Tequila feel.. that is not a bad thing... it is a good thing... you have a great ear.... keep up the good work.. nothin wrong with having fun with loops.... You arranged it.. it's ALL YOU!
       Jim

Not bad at all, good as a soundtrack for a game or sth like that.
Happy song, gives me a pleasant feeling of joy.

yeah that's very cool Ralph, it'll be great if u could contribute your lyrics into my song. i have a couple of songs as well but still doesn't have a lyric because i'm too dumb in making a lyric, lol..
and thanks for your offer! can't wait to see the result.