Oh whatever.. the 1st one is lame ;D
Hope you like this one. Still, the lyrics are childish. xD

I like the simplicity of this..and I don't think the lyrics are childish - I rather like them I think.  The vocals are pretty good, seemed a little loud in the mix at times though...the ending caught me by surprise, I was expecting the song to keep building and building, then drop into a nice gentle bridge, then back into an emphatic chorus til the end.  That might be an approach to try - it sounds a little incomplete to me right now.  Good job - keep at it!

The ending isn't the ending;D it's not the full song. Just a demo. thanx, btw : )

Hey, not bad at all. I'd like to hear the whole thing once it's done. Like the above person said, some of the vocals are a bit loud in places, but once you get the mix balanced, this song has some really good potential.
Keep it up.