I went to a friends house, he started playing this one the keyboard I just started singing.
I don't know what to think I hate and love it.

Keyboard sounds good... 18 secs into song so far.  Vocs are a bit buried at start then get too loud.  1:05 into song so far.  Sounds like you are holding a bit back on your vocs until you get too loud... STOP SINGING FROM YOUR THROAT... EEEEEEEEEEEEK!  2:25 into song so far.  Why did the keyboards just get louder?  AAAAAAHHHHH, calm down (or sing death metal style -- one or the two).  3:40 into song so far.  AAAAAHHHH HEEEEELPPPP HIMMMMMM! 4:26 into song so far.

ok................

i very much think this is work in progress...........not a finished piece ..at all...ok
i think hate it till its finished??????????

then we can all be happy!!

fish

This cool for a Jam.

Hope you can develope the song.

You need to have the keyboard set to touch feel to follow your highs in the vox, that would be awesome,
it would give the song very strong dynamics.

Denis

yeah cant wait for it to be finished its sounds pretty sweet

Trying too hard on the vocals or this would be ok. As it is, it kinda hurt to listen to. I have a feeling of what you were trying to achieve. Maybe David Drayman of Disturbed could pull it off. For your tone of voice(which I think sounds pretty good) maybe you should try relaxing a bit. Sit up straight and sing from your belly. I know you can pull this off.

Sing all of the notes and try and avoid yelling at the same time, try and retain the emotion. After alot of practice I am sure you could yell AND hold a note. For now....

Your voice is awesome...I think...Just sing.

I can't wait to hear this song inparticular redone.
thx for posting....keep working!

-Mark

Just learn to control your vocals. Maybe the screaming part could be better if you had tutoring...or step an inch back from the mic. You can hear it clearly the creaking and out of control vocals. Thats my main problem with it.

Well even though their are parts where you lose control and it may not fit the perameters of what is "acceptable" I think the raw emotion of the whole song is far superior to following the controlled grid. The emotional quality is golden, i hear it and get the goosebumps. Sometimes for a song to be at its potential; polished harmoniousness isnt going to give it the life of harsh reality. I say it effen rocks.