Ah yes... another hopeless love song.  Either way I played both guitars, and sang it and mix the drums (using a drum kit on my computer).  Now, I may or may not be able to sing but I kinda like the song.  It is the second song I wrote and recorded but one of my best as far as I'm concerned.

I may re-record a more "electric" version of this song later on but for now, this is it.  Let me know your opinions and how I may improve.

Timing problems, drums dont fit to the guitar(s). a bad try

Mr T. very to the point there.   ...so where would you like us to start ? I suggest...

Start with the drum track & get it sounding like u want. If it's a loop, there should be no timing issues (yet). Next practise your guitar part along to the drum track (unrecorded). Your strumming doesn't flow with the beat in places, which is what TritonKeyboarder picked up on. When you are in sync, record the guitar part(s). Record the vocals last. Did you do the vocals with the guitar together before ? recording the vocal track seperately allows you to concentrate on what you are singing. In the current version it's all muffled & mumbled. Of course there are lots of ways of 'lifting' the vocal track so it is more prominent but what you get out is always based on what you put in if you get my point.

Lastly - thanks for sharing. Not bad for your first posting & I always try to be as constructive as possible on here without upsetting people or sounding like yer Mum.  Lets hear more from you.

Hey ,
The IDEA is great but I have to agree with other technical comments posted here. Your guitar playing style might be de-tuning your guitar slightly (squeezing too hard or slight string bending). Yeah, the drums are boring but I assume you know that. You should find some friends who can lay down rhythm tracks and see what happens. Also, just a style comment, your singing doesn't have to follow the phrasing of the rhytm track exactly (as you do on the hook). try phrasing the vocs a little looser - the track is so laid back it needs a laid-back vocal. Nice song though!

Ah... thanks for the good feedback so far...  I used Adobe Audition to record the music and audio so each track is seprate and yes, I did record the vocals last after the guitar tracks.  I don't really have any musician friends that have drums to lay down a track for me, but I would like to liven it up a bit.  Maybe in a later version.

Thanks...  alot of people that have heard it like the song plus it doesn't help when my brother sends it to his friends. 

Either way, thanks for the input so far...